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Posted by Joseph on April 24, 2009 at 10:20 PM

Great story. Can't wait to get to the sex scenes...

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6 Comments

Reply not me
12:40 PM on April 26, 2009 
There are plenty.
Reply Melody
12:43 PM on April 26, 2009 
Awesome, is there more?
Reply Cheryl
10:27 AM on April 27, 2009 
I just read it. I was interested from the very first. If there is more, I would like to read it. I think you" got it goin on" Girl.
Reply Brandy
8:32 AM on May 10, 2009 
I'm so impressed!  I LOVE this sentence, "Hap taught me how to take advantage of the good ol' boy system that skirts the police department arena where my position plays a part."  Especially the use of 'skirts': very clever! All the descriptions are so vivid and wonderful.  I love the lady in the convenience store and the "painted toenails dangle just a few inches beside the newly upholstered dining chair"...it makes me remember what I'm missing in the books I've been reading lately.  I'm addicted to the Twilight series, but for the love story, not the story itself.   This kind of detail and description is so great! "to the size-range of fat to skinny clothes a woman wears". I have a few criticisms though.  While I'm no stranger to the f-bomb, it is harsh to read it in print.  There are already several 'shits', a 'hell' or two and a 'pissed' as well as the 'fucking' here at the end.  If you keep that pace through the whole book, it's too much for me.  I'd still read it, but it's a little distracting.  The other thing will be corrected by an editor, but there are several mispellings and grammar mistakes.    All in all, I can't wait to read on and find out more about Glen or Glenn, Kacy and all the back-story there and of course Megan!  Did you name Sam for Sam Elliot?  Meow!
Reply PKrayer
8:44 AM on May 10, 2009 
After reading the entire book...First impression: well plotted book with a cool double twist at the end. Colorful first-person narrative with great local Fort Worth cop-life grit. O'Neal writes in an intensely visual style that would make the manuscript a fairly easy conversion to screenplay or script.
Reply Jill
7:28 AM on May 15, 2009 
I love it so far and have only read a half of this (printed it out already). You definitely have a future ahead as a writer and I love it so far!!!!!!!! :-)

Jill

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